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You came to know about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – describe the equipment – explain how it might be useful at your workplace – offer help in purchasing it

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to buy a new colour
printer
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 for the financial department. As we have only one
printer
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 in the office which is capable of printing in black and white.
However
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, it takes so long to print from one
printer
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at the end
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 of every month.
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, we need a colour
printer
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 as well to differentiate between financial graphs.
Last
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 month, we found an error in the report of
last
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 month and that took around 2 business days to fix , just because of the black and white print.
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, getting a new colour
printer
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 would be more suitable for our work
as well as
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 it is more efficient for our job.
Overall
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, it brings a huge profit to our company save more and work fast.
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, I will take the total responsibility to buy it, as
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 live just 5 minutes walking distance from the biggest electronic store in
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 city. I hope to hear from you soon, Preet.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • state-of-the-art
  • ergonomic
  • cost-effective
  • streamline processes
  • boost productivity
  • enhance efficiency
  • high-quality
  • integrate into our workflow
  • ROI (return on investment)
  • implement
  • facilitate
  • procurement
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