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Some people prefer to live in the quite of the country, others prefer hustle and bustle of the city. Which do you think is better choice, state your position and support it with specific reasons and examples.

#people #country #bustle #city #choice #position #support
In the recent world ,
rate
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 of urbanization
of
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in
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 many countries is
well
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developing day by day. In spite of the fact that some humans who know about living in cities' drawbacks move to
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the countrysides
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countryside
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countrysides
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,countrysides
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 I would emphasize living in modern towns. There are several reasons why I
agreed
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 with people' option who prefer to live in a city. The first thing I would like to draw your attention to is that there are all
facilities
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the facilities
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 are within walking
in
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of
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 actual towns.
Secondly
 , there are many centres
where
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that
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 have
highly
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a high
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 education system with a lot of offers as well.
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,
while
 a student is studying at a university he or she can
be gone to
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 abroad or able to be offered to set up own business by
university's
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the university's
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 professors,
also
 can stay there as a teacher or
university's
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university
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 staff
as
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. It means that there are
well paid
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well-paid
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Jobs
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Job
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opportuinies
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opportunities
 which give
sufficiant
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sufficient
 incomes if you cook as
good
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well
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 or just can wash dishes .
On the other hand
, staying
inhabit
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in rural areas gives an individual natural health and forever beauty a
consequense
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consequence
 of having fresh air and organic food there. There is one cause of why people prefer to live in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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 is that cities are full of traffic
jams'continously
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jams
 voice and carbonate anhydride gases which are caused
to
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by
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 air pollution issues and even it can be seen from
this
 that villages are peaceful.
However
, if you
a
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have a
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headeache or pain
on
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in
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 your body you just go to a hospital
that is
 located
nearby
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near
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 your house in
avent
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apply
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grade towns
than
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rather than
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 suffering from
hospital
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the hospital
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 centre's
servises
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services
 which are built one each village.
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, they can not arrive on time if you call a health centre in a rural because of your health problem. In conclusion ,
althrough
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although
 there are many defects
as well as
 advantages I would like to live in cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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