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The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.

The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.
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The graph below illustrates the information on the trip length in the USA accomplished by children from 5 to 15 years old. If we look at the amount of miles in 1970, it seems that cycling and bus travel were the most popular at
this
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 time,
while
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 trips by taxi were the least place. After
that
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 it fluctuated and reached
the
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a
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 peak in
2000
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the 2000
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 year with 20 miles indicators. There was a considerable rise in the usage of
bus
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buses
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, which rose from almost thirty miles
length
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in length
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 to
fourty
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forty
. Walking travelling sharply dropped in 2000 year and gradually increased till 2020. Cars reached the peak at thirty
distant
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distance
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 respectively and
then
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 decreased. Train longitude fluctuated all over the time
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, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the length of taxi and bus application
,
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while
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 walking
as well as
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 cycling trips show
the
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 downward trend.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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