The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph displays the volume of women and men
gym
members
between the years 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, In comparison to the first year, the number of female
gym
members
outnumbered the males towards the end of the period. Both sexes,
however
, saw minor variations over time. From 1980, the number of male
members
in the
gym
climbed dramatically the next year, reaching about 4000, before dropping significantly in the following two years, amounting to approximately 1800
members
.
This
figure recovered from 2000 to 2005, reaching a peak of over 5,000 male
gym
members
.
However
,
this
number declined in 2010, resulting in its lowest figure throughout the period. On the other hand, the
gym
 began with slightly over 1,000 female
members
and progressively increased to around 1900 in 1985, following the opposite gender's pattern. It had the largest membership between 1995 and 2000, with just under 3000
members
, with a small decline in 2000.
Finally
, by the conclusion of the period, female
members
numbered around 1900,
while
male
members
numbered slightly under 1000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • membership trends
  • male and female comparison
  • notable increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • consistently
  • peak points
  • divergent patterns
  • parallels in trends
  • correlation
  • timeframe
  • cultural shifts
  • awareness of fitness
  • significant differences
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