Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. discuss both views and give your openion.

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It is an argument whether wards should learn online or use hard copy materials.
This
essay seeks to look at both opinions.
To begin
with, considering the fact that we live in a technological world today, I see why people are of the opinion that
children
should learn to read online. Using technological devices can enable
children
to have access to study materials anywhere and at
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. Most of the reading sources are free. Reading online and learning to
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one's way on those platforms is the genesis
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acquainting oneself with technology.
Children
are fast learners and it is logical for them to get some exposure from reading online at an early age since as they grow they will be required to perform more advanced tasks online. It
also
saves pupils the need to carry heavy reading materials to school which was concluded by studies to cause backache in most school
children
. Meanwhile, surfing online is not without drawbacks. Without strict supervision which may be difficult to achieve,
children
can get exposed to adult
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like violent movie scenes and even end up playing games which can distract their learning.
On the other hand
, I can understand why reading hard copy is
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by some folks. A child studying using a
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is likely to be focused. It is the traditional way of learning which yielded brilliant folks like Albert Einstein. The fact that printed copies cannot be carried everywhere is likely to make students commit the contents of what they read to memory. They have the opportunity to underline details
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they wish to recall later. Using books eliminates distracting acts like playing games, scouting social media and chatting with friends. It is evident
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these points that
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building pupils' knowledge and I strongly recommend
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is
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approved.
To sum up
, I agree with making
children
learn using hard copies since they may waste time with social media and games when reading soft copies.
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