The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides information about the volume of participating
students
in the UK and their chosen sports from 2001 to 2011.
Overall
, the number of
students
who chose football, running, and swimming increased
at the end
of the period, except for basketball.
However
, football remained the most popular sport out of four activities over the years. From the years 2001 to 2007, despite the fluctuations, football stayed
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the most popular type of activity, as shown by its figures, reaching its peak three times in the years 2002, 2004, and 2006, with over 70
students
each year mentioned.
After
this
pattern, it remained essentially unchanged until 2011, when it ranged from about 65 to 68, respectively. Basketball,
on the other hand
, was the second most popular sport until 2006, when the number of
students
sharply declined to just over 20 in 2008, and
this
steadily continued until 2011. Meanwhile, running, being the least chosen sport at the beginning of the year with around 19 participants, outnumbered basketball in the year 2007 with approximately 50
students
, which made it second place.
whereas
swimming had a dramatic increase from 2005 to 2006, reaching a peak of over 50
students
.
This
figure did not
last
, as it declined back to about 20
students
at the end
of the period, similar to how high it started.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak
  • lowest point
  • gender distribution
  • new entrants
  • drop in participation
  • continuation/discontinuation
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