City planners tend to arrange schools, homes ,shops and offices in specific areas and separate them from each other . Do you think the advantage overweight the disadvantage?

To start with, the very advantage of
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trend is that every section is independent of its specifications which makes every part
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offer its services perfectly.
For example
, homes are places where people need to take their privacy and relax, so the area should be quiet and far away from the hustle and bustle of the other areas .
In addition
, keeping these parts away from each other will contribute
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the crowding with vehicles and population.
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, these types of plans help to prevent overcrowding and traffic on the roads particularly , at
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rush hours when all these places are a destination for different peers people neither for work , education or rest
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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