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The line graph illustrates the operation of the stolen cars for every 1000 in Canada, Great Britian, France and Sweden in nine years between 1990 to 1999.

The line graph illustrates the operation of the stolen cars for every 1000 in Canada, Great Britian, France and Sweden in nine years between 1990 to 1999.
The line graph provides information about the
volume
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 of stolen vehicles, specifically cars, in three
countries
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 from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
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, all
countries
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 decreased
in
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the
number
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 of
thefts
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at the end
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 of the period, except for Sweden. Meanwhile, the
volume
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 of stolen cars in Great
Britain
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 remained the highest compared to the other three nations in the nine-year period. Except for a small dip in 1993, the
number
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 of vehicles stolen in Great
Britain
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 grew from 1990 to the following year, reaching around 20,000, which continued until 1996.
However
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,
this
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number
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 declined to over 18000 in 1999, reaching its lowest
number
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 of
thefts
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. Despite
this
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, Great
Britain
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 stayed at the top of all three
countries
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. Take Sweden as one of these nations;
although
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 it had the
least
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lowest
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volume
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 of
thefts
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in
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 the beginning of the period, the steady increase was showcased throughout, illustrated by roughly 7000 in 1990 and reaching a peak of 13000 in 1999, making it second to Great
Britain
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. France and Canada,
on the other hand
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, have had a similar trend within the past nine years. From 1990 to 1993, France experienced a decrease in figures, which ranged from 8000 down to 6000.
This
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 was essentially unchanged until 1999, except for the slight increase in 1995, which had approximately 7000
thefts
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. The pattern with Canada is relatively similar from 1990 to 1993,
although
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 since
then
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, the numbers remained until 1999, with around 6500, which resulted in France and Canada having the
least
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lowest
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volume
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 of stolen cars of all four
countries
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words volume, countries, number, thefts, britain with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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