the bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories

the bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories
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The bar chart provides information about the average expenditure of four countries in various categories,
such
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as
food
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, housing, transportation,
health
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care
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, and clothing, in 2009.
Overall
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, Except for
Japan
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, all countries spent the majority of their money on housing,
while
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clothing and
health
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care
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were the least spent
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.
Japan
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, on the other side, had
food
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as its highest expense. In the housing category, the United
States
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had the highest share out of the four nations, with about 27%, and Canada was the lowest spender with just over 20%. Meanwhile,
food
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was the top spending in
Japan
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, with an approximately 23% share,
in contrast
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to the United
States
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, with just under 15% worth of
food
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expenses. Transportation was the third rate in the United Kingdom and
Japan
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, with about 15% and 10%, respectively.
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, it was the second for the United
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and Canada, with roughly 18% and 20% shares, respectively. The two other categories,
such
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as
health
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care
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and clothing, saw lower portions compared to the three abovementioned. To illustrate, the United
States
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topped among four countries with a share of around 8% in
health
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care
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,
in contrast
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to the United Kingdom with approximately 2%, which is the lowest in all of its expenditures. Canada and the United Kingdom spent almost 6% to 7% of their money on clothing,
on the other hand
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, the United
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and
Japan
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never went over 4%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, health, care, japan, states with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • percentage
  • bar chart
  • allocation
  • distribution
  • consumer spending
  • economic indicator
  • fiscal priorities
  • trend analysis
  • budget allocation
  • disposable income
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