the bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories

the bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories
The bar chart provides information about the average expenditure of four countries in various categories,
such
as
food
, housing, transportation,
health
care
, and clothing, in 2009.
Overall
, Except for
Japan
, all countries spent the majority of their money on housing,
while
clothing and
health
care
were the least spent
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.
Japan
, on the other side, had
food
as its highest expense. In the housing category, the United
States
had the highest share out of the four nations, with about 27%, and Canada was the lowest spender with just over 20%. Meanwhile,
food
was the top spending in
Japan
, with an approximately 23% share,
in contrast
to the United
States
, with just under 15% worth of
food
expenses. Transportation was the third rate in the United Kingdom and
Japan
, with about 15% and 10%, respectively.
However
, it was the second for the United
States
and Canada, with roughly 18% and 20% shares, respectively. The two other categories,
such
as
health
care
and clothing, saw lower portions compared to the three abovementioned. To illustrate, the United
States
topped among four countries with a share of around 8% in
health
care
,
in contrast
to the United Kingdom with approximately 2%, which is the lowest in all of its expenditures. Canada and the United Kingdom spent almost 6% to 7% of their money on clothing,
on the other hand
, the United
States
and
Japan
never went over 4%.
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  • expenditure
  • categories
  • percentage
  • bar chart
  • allocation
  • distribution
  • consumer spending
  • economic indicator
  • fiscal priorities
  • trend analysis
  • budget allocation
  • disposable income
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