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IELTS 8 - Exam 1 - Writing Task 2 Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that schools is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the modern era,being an ideal
member
 of
world
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 is
extermely
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extremely
 important. It is a common topic of debate among people that
schools
 should teach children to be a fine
member
 of the community
however
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, others believe that it is their parent's job.
This
 essay will discuss both of these views before my opinion.
To begin
 with, homes are the first
schools
 where
parents
 teach their offspring about the way to behave
infront
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in front
 of
other
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another member
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member
 of society.
For instance
, we all have experienced that when our
parents
 took us along to a family function or a
partys
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party
, they used to teach us beforehand not to act foolish in front of others.
therefore
,
this constant corrections
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 in behaviour become permanent which
latter
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later
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 becomes our personality. The main goal of
are
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our
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parents
 is to show the world our better version so that their child could become a good
member
 among others.
On the other hand
,
a
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schools
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schools
a
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place where
childern
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children
from different backgrounds come together to learn, which means now they have contact with each other as they have different behaviour but still manage to work in teams to achieve a
commmon
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common
 goal.
For example
, in
schools
 teachers make groups of students
to
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perform
a
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the
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 complex task of arranging a play or a game which requires a joint effort from team members,
this
 common effort reflects the capability of children to become an ideal part of society. In my opinion, a school and
parents
 both are equally important
to educate
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a
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apply
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young
individual
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individuals
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 about their role in society and how they can create a better and
safe
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safer
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 environment to live
when
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 they grow up.
To conclude
, it can be said that
parents
teaches
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 their child how to behave till a certain age. After that, it is
duty
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the duty
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 of
schools
 to guide young people to the path of becoming a better component of
public
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the public
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.
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