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Write about the following topic: Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition totheir main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a controversy among academic societies, mostly
students
, about the results of deciding to put effort and
time
 into different ways. Common sense of academic societies believes that putting all the
time
 and effort into pursuing qualifications is more important than the other things.
On the other hand
, some
students
 have
this
 idea that learning some other
subjects
besides
 their professional
subjects
 can be helpful in different
aspects
.
This
 essay will evaluate both views regarding the given topic and will suggest the author's opinion.
Firstly
, learning some other
subjects
in addition
 to your profession can have different results in the various
aspects
 of your
life
. These kinds of lessons will help
students
 to make connections with other people in different academic areas which can lead to academic co-operations later.
Also
, learning different
subjects
 will make
students
 more creative and not just have one-dimension minds and learn new things for their different
aspects
 of
life
 which can make a massive success for them.
For instance
, many Olympic athletes are university
students
 and they used to play in the university teams.
However
, these kinds of
subjects
 can distract
students
 from their professional lives and lead to not gaining as much improvement in
this
 criterion.
For example
, Olympic athletes may not be as professional as somebody who spent all of their
time
 in that specific profession.
On the other hand
,
however
, being dedicated to one special field can gain you so much expertise in that field, spending all of your
time
 on one subject leads to burnout and the chance of giving up on that qualification becomes so much higher than before.
This
 can be like a marathon and as you may know, many participants in the marathon give up in the middle of it. So having some additional
subjects
 may help
students
 not burn out. Personally, I have carried out
this
 idea since I remember that other
subjects
 like arts can be so helpful in achieving your professional goals by balancing your
life
 and mental situation in different
aspects
 of
life
. There are so many benefits that are described later and it
also
 makes
students
 more successful in different parts of their lives. So in a nutshell,
however
, dedicating your
time
 and effort to one specific subject can make you an expert in that subject, it
also
 can make you give up on that. On these occasions, learning other
subjects
 rather than a profession not only prevents
this
 but
also
 helps you to be more successful in different
aspects
 of your
life
.
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