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The pie charts below show the electricity generation by source in China and Spain in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the electricity generation by source in China and Spain in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts provide information about the proportion of generation of
electricity
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 in France in two years, 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, natural gas and coal were the primary
sources
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 of energy in 1990
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 but were overtaken by nuclear power in 2010.
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, coal remained one of the biggest
sources
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 of supply to produce
electricity
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, and hydropower the least in both years. In 1990, it was evident that coal and natural gas were the major fuel
sources
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, accounting for 28 per
cent
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 of the
totals
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.
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 was followed by oil, with 22 per
cent
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, placing it as the second-most-used ingredient for
electricity
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. Hydropower and nuclear power,
on the other hand
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, have had 6 per
cent
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 and 17 per
cent
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, respectively. Meanwhile, nuclear power was used by more than half of all other
sources
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, at 67 per
cent
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 of the total in 2010.
Electricity
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 was produced
this
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 year at 13 per
cent
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 with coal and oil; it is important to note that coal remained the second most used source in both years.
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, hydropower remained the least utilised fuel source at 2% of the total in 2010.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, sources, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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