Some people think that youngsters should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefits for the community and individuals?

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Nowadays, youngsters
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everywhere without
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to do. Many nations believe that the jobless youth can
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a
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work
by helping people in the community. At
this
statement, I strongly agree that the little guy should help the
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to shape their
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. First and foremost, teens play an important role when the NGOs need
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labour without paying enough salary.
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, they can
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a valuable experience to them so they can train the teenagers to be a kind person, help
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finish
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job and obey
with
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the rules.
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,
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platform in Indonesia called Markoding
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recruitment for voluntary
work
for college students to grow their mindset.
Consequently
, the experiences that they get will be priceless in
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future
career
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careers
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. They
also
will have an independent personality to make money by themselves.
However
, sometimes the youth
generations
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was
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difficult
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to manage
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the
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time especially between
work
and school so the NGOs need to manage their expectations if they want to hire immaturity people who
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still
on
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the
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college.
Moreover
, they
also
feel overwhelmed when the workload
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very heavy because they are not
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for
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doing
work
outside the college and it can affect their academic performance.
For example
, a student from Airlangga University are actively participating in various unpaid
work
but they can not manage their grades.
Therefore
, even though NGOs open voluntary
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, it is better to
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more on their daily activities. In summary,
youth
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young
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people could have a
change
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chance
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to have an early career by applying
to
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the
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unpaid
work
. In the future,
instead
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drawbacks that they still lack of doing an expert job, it will help their personality to become an independent person.
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  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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