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Children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pay some of or all of the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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In
this
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 day and age, the government of many countries provide free primary and secondary, even tertiary
education
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 for the public. In my opinion, the positive effects of
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 policy on individuals and nations are more than the drawbacks. To start with,
education
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 can equip the youth with basic skills for
employments
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. Take language as an example, it is not only a necessary ability to learn other knowledge, but
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 a training of communication.
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,
while
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 the accumulation
knowledge
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 of
varies
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 subjects, students may find the areas where they are good at
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 so that they can determine their own direction of development and eventually make outstanding achievements.
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 to say, more widespread basic
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 leads to more high-skilled talents, which can promote the faster development of a country’s economy.
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, schools can teach children basic social rules.
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, it is right to be respectful and disciplined at school, and talking dirty, cheating in exams and bullying classmates are wrong. If juveniles are clear
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 behaviors are recognized by others and which will be punished, they are more likely to be law-abiding citizens than criminals after
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grown-up
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.
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, the more numbers of a state
have
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 experienced
such
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 basic
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, the more stable the social security will be.
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,
due to
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 the high cost of schools,
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free basic
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 for the whole people means decreasing investment
for
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 other aspects,
such
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construction
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 of infrastructural facilities and health care, which may lead to a series of social problems. In conclusion, if the budget is sufficient, it is worthwhile for the authorities to invest in basic
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, which can bring economic and security returns to a nation.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic disparities
  • government funding
  • educational institutions
  • enhanced quality of education
  • educated workforce
  • boosting the economy
  • dependency
  • bureaucracy
  • innovation
  • flexibility
  • parental involvement
  • financially responsible
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