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What are the effects of allowing children to use internet without adult control?

#effects #children #internet #adult #control
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In our modern
world
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internet
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 can be found in every home surrounding humanity. For years humanity used other community ways
such
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 as letters telephone etc. The invention of ''
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internet''
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internet internet
internet
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'' has led humanity to face a different
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, yet an uncertain
world
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. The invention was a success making human life more effective but every good thing in
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world
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 has consequences. What are the impacts of the
internet
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in
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on
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 our future? The future so-called ''our
children
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''?
Children
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 are really gullible and they need their
adults
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 to teach them how to live a life. But as the years pass and technology improves,
adults
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 have less time to spend with their
children
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thus
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 leaving the
children
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 with the
internet
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 providing no restrictions.
This
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 may be found acceptable for most people yet it is not. the
internet
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 is a dangerous place if it is not used correctly. To prevent
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 situation
adults
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 should
control
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 their kids if they don't want to lose the connection with them.
Internet
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 without adult
control
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 though, leads to a total catastrophe.
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 social websites may make the
children
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 feel insufficient and uncourageous despite the
internet
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's help in finding information and socializing with people. The affection and addiction are very clear.
children
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 who use the
internet
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 without their adult's
control
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 will mostly be unsuccessful in their school,
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,
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 leading to an unfilling life
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, depression. and the effects are not over yet. The most common effect is making the child introverted. An introverted person lacks the skill of socializing, leading to discrimination from society, and an unwanted individual. the
internet
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 may be beneficial and helpful but only in good hands. In conclusion,
adults
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 who let their
children
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 use the
internet
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 without restriction will experience its consequences, If
adults
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 want their
children
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 to be
a normal individuals
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a normal individual
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 fitting society they must take action and
control
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 the
internet
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 usage in their homes, saving their
children
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 so-called their ''future generation''.
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