In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A debate over whether the change in family structure and family roles has a positive impact or a negative impact has long been a subject of discussion. Some
people
believe that the
changes
occurred
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in family structures gave them freedom and privacy but
on the other hand
, some
people
think that these
changes
left an individual alone.
To begin
with, family structure plays a vital role in the grooming of kids
as well as
the young generation. At
first,
people
used to live in a joint family where all the brothers and sisters used to live in the same house with their parents. Parents were the head of the family and had the authority to keep a check on everyone. Every decision is taken by the head of the family after discussing it with everyone and whenever an individual
get
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stuck in a problem, all the other members of the family try to help him/her.
For instance
, if an individual gets some mental illness like depression or anxiety, other members would help that person by giving a friendly company and other kind of help if needed.
Furthermore
,
people
are now preferring neutral
families
in which they only live with their life partner. In neutral
families
, there is no head of the family.
Therefore
, there is no one to keep
check
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. The kids in neutral
families
do not realize the value of the joint
families
.
Therefore
, they lack certain kinds of grooming.
For example
, today's kids
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not enjoy the company of grandparents and they lack their love and affection. In short,
changes
in family structures affect
people
in a negative way. These
changes
will completely isolate individuals in their own life and the new generation will lack the emotional connections of family.
Although
there are certain
people
who are happy in neutral
families
and do not want to live in a joint family.
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task response
The essay addresses the prompt but lacks depth in the discussion of the positive and negative impacts of the changes in family structure and roles. More detailed analysis and examples are needed to fully address the question.
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The logical structure and introduction/conclusion are present, but the essay lacks clear development in supporting the main points. The coherence could be improved through better organization of ideas and clearer transitions between paragraphs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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