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Some people buy their children whatever they ask for and allow their children to do whatever they want to do. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences do this style of parenting have for children as they grow older?

#people #children #consequences #style
Nowadays most
of
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the
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people
prefer
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 live alone or with their partners rather than create a family.
According to
 their beliefs, is easier
grow
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 an animal
such
 as a dog
instead
 of
raise
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a
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a child
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children
. In fact,
have
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 offspring means not only
spend
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 a lot of money for education or for everything that they need, but
also
 it means
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 time to grow them in the
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 way ever. 80 Unlike the against considerations, I strongly support
that is
 necessary to have enough time to spend and maybe waste for your
children
 if you want to raise them. To illustrate, nowadays, most
of
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young people do not want to study and build
a
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 own future based on culture and education, but they prefer to become an "
influencer
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", who are teenagers that live creating and doing videos to upload on various applications in the
smarthphone
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smartphone
.
Therefore
, every
children
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 always
need
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 all the clothes, shoes and games that the others have to become an influencer and
based
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 their life to have more followers than the others. So, nowadays, is easier buy to our
children
 whatever they ask
instead
 of
make
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 them feel at a lower
lever
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 than the other people that they watch on
the
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 smartphones. 208
To conclude
, in my opinion,
allow
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children
 to buy everything that they want is not a good way to raise them, because they have to learn that,
fist
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 of all, is difficult
earn
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 money and, second of all,
this
 type of style of parenting will have bad consequences when they grow older
such
 as waste money in
un useful
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 stuff.
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