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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.
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The given line graph compares the proportion of
people
 owning a
car
 in Britain during the 36-year period between 1971 and 2007.
Overall
, it can be seen that the percentage of households who had
cars
 soared gradually. Supplementary, the figure for individuals with one
car
 remained unchanged,
whereas
 the number of
people
 without a
car
 plunged during the given period of time. For the first 4 years,
people
 with three or more
cars
maintain
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 the same level,
while
 those who used two
cars
 rose to 10%. In the following four
years
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 the percentage of
people
 who had 2
cars
 remained unchanged.
Similarly
, those
people
 used three or more
cars
. The rest of the time witnessed a substantial growth in the figure of
people
 with 2
cars
 to approximately 30%,
whereas
 households with three or more
cars
 increased slightly to 6%. From 1971 to 2007, the number of
people
 who had one
car
 increased to nearly 45%.
By contrast
, households with no
car
 experienced a substantial fall to 45%. For the next 32 years, the
people
 have only one
car
 after some fluctuation conserves the same percentage at about two-fifths,
however
,
people
 without
cars
 dropped by 25%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, car, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.
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