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The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
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The line graph presents figures for the
sales
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 of three distinct types of
books
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 from 2002 to 2006 in a specific country.
Overall
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, the
sales
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 of children's
books
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 and educational
books
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 increased over the time period
while
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 a reverse trend was seen in the distribution of adult fiction
books
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.
To begin
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 with, the number of
books
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 read by children in the initial
year
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 was around 33
million
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. The figure increased in the next
year
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 to reach above 40
million
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. To add on, the increasing trend continued steadily till 2005 after which there was a steep increase and
finally
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, the number landed at 55
million
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. Moving
further
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, the adult fiction
books
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'
sales
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was
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 at 47
million
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 in 2002 after which , the
sales
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 showed a decline and
followed
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were followed
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 by a small value of increase. After the
year
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 2004, the
sales
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 were declining after that
year
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 and ended at 30
million
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. It is evident that the
sales
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 of educational
books
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 started approximately at 25
million
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 which rose above 30
million
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 in the subsequent
year
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.
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, after 2003 , the
sales
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 reduced till 2005 and increased
at
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 the
last
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year
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 to end up with 30
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, books, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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