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The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
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The line graph presents figures for the
sales
 of three distinct types of
books
 from 2002 to 2006 in a specific country.
Overall
, the
sales
 of children's
books
 and educational
books
 increased over the time period
while
 a reverse trend was seen in the distribution of adult fiction
books
.
To begin
 with, the number of
books
 read by children in the initial
year
 was around 33
million
. The figure increased in the next
year
 to reach above 40
million
. To add on, the increasing trend continued steadily till 2005 after which there was a steep increase and
finally
, the number landed at 55
million
. Moving
further
, the adult fiction
books
'
sales
was
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 at 47
million
 in 2002 after which , the
sales
 showed a decline and
followed
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 by a small value of increase. After the
year
 2004, the
sales
 were declining after that
year
 and ended at 30
million
. It is evident that the
sales
 of educational
books
 started approximately at 25
million
 which rose above 30
million
 in the subsequent
year
.
However
, after 2003 , the
sales
 reduced till 2005 and increased
at
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 the
last
year
 to end up with 30
million
.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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