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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
Since mankind invented cars and
trains
, choosing
a
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effiecent
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efficient
 and
permanant
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permanent
traveling
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travelling
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 option has been the most important thing to do.Either car
and
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or
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 train
has
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have
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 some advantages and disadvantages
therfore
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therefore
 finding the best way for governments
for
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to
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sciety's
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society's
money
 investing
become
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becomes
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 a hard problem to solve.In following
paragraphes
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paragraphs
 will
be shown
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show
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 some pros and cons of
railways
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railway
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 travelling
options
 in comparison with
roads
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road
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options
.
Trains
 and
railways
almost
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are the best and safest
options
 for people with travel
destinatios
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destinations
destination
.
Trains
 are safe for people and
environment
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the environment
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, scientists in
USA
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the USA
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 said that
rate
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 of
fussile
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fossil
fissile
futile
 energy usage
are
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is
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 less than 20
percentages
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per cent
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 for
railways
,
that
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which
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 is less than twice
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the neumber
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neumber
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number
 of car
usages
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usage
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 for
entire
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the entire
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 year, and for mentioned
reason
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,reason
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 governments should invest more
money
for
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in
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 upgrading
railways
 and
trains
 faculties. But
in
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on
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other
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the other
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 hand
railways
 are slower,in some countries, and harder
for changing
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rather
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apply
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than
roads
.
Roads
 are
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a center
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center
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centre
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 for
cennecting
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connecting
 modern society together. For mentioned reason people always choose to travel
with
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by
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cars
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car
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 rather than
trains
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train
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 because it
give
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gives
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 you more
optiones
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options
 for when you decide to travel thereby
gevrnments
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governments
 tend to spend more
money
 on
roads
 rather than
railways
.But road
are
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is
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 not safe enough as
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a permanant
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permanant
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permanent
 travelling option and
it
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they
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 cause more time
consumations
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consumption
consumptions
consummations
 and it is more expensive than
railways
 because of petrol usage.
As
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a
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apply
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conclusion both
method
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methods
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 has some mentioned good and bad side
for
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to
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 investing
money
 but
trains
 and
railways
 are more safe and
economical
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more economical
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 travelling option in comparison with
road
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the road
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.
Trains
also
 have
the
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a
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 better
relation
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relationship
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 with the environment.
Thereby
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Therefore
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 investing
money
 in
railways
 and making a
balance
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balanced
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 relation between
rate
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the rate
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 of
roads
 and
railways
options
 are the best way for governments
for making
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to make
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 travellers happy.
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