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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people say that punishment is the best means for children to
make
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perform. But I never agree with
this
 view. On the one hand, If elders are disadvantaged for students because of their performance, how they could feel? As been punished, Children could feel devastated. When I was a child, my teacher wanted me to get a great score on
school
 tests. She believes that the right discipline makes me have more force than before. Sometimes I ruined my test, she did it to me. But because of her acting, I lost positive thinking. It has controlled my past and I lost many chances
while
 growing up. After graduating from
school
, I have to make double an effort to recover my mind. Of course, I know my class teacher had done all things for me, but it was had a negative mind. In my opinion, many youngsters might be the same as me.
On the other hand
, rewards can encourage student's achievement. If there is a big deal, students would compete to gain that. By
this
 race, it can be grown up them better. My friend always did hard in
school
 to get some benefit. Ultimately she was admitted to the best university in Korea. Having watched her, I decided to live harder. The advantage of profit doesn't limit one person. It has functions for developing groups.
Therefore
 I can say rewards in
school
 have a positive influence entire society. Throughout these two views, in
conclusion
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 reward is a better method than punishment in
school
.
Therefore
, teachers or old people must give rewards to children
to
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 outcomes.
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