In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is argued that industries and businesses are encouraged by governments in several countries to relocate their
activities
to suburban
areas
outside the big
cities
. I believe that the advantages of
this
view overshadow the disadvantages. Governments in some countries are planning to relocate businesses’
activities
to the regional
areas
. In fact,
this
plan
has been applied by a few nations.
For instance
, in Indonesia, most companies are located in the suburban
area
(Karawang).
Nevertheless
, that
area
was not a good place to live because of the limited facilities and far away from the big
cities
.
Therefore
, people are choosing to stay in Jakarta and will commute to Karawang.
However
,
this
journey will take a long time which can affect people’s well-being. Lack of well-being will lead to the workers’ performance, and it is not a good thing for the workers’
activities
.
On the other hand
, the
plan
of relocating the
area
of industries and businesses from governments can give a benefit for the city itself. One of the advantages is
this
circumstance is able to reduce the environmental issues
such
as pollutants and wastes in the big
cities
that are the result of the businesses’
activities
. It is because the
activities
will be more centered in the regional
areas
which are far from the metropolitan
areas
.
As a consequence
, the quality of life in the city will be better and it is a good movement for human lives.
In addition
, individuals will be healthier and not easily get sick, especially their respiratory system because of environmental issues. In summary, the government’s plans to allocate the
area
of industries and businesses in some countries can affect employees’ well-being.
However
,
this
plan
will help to reduce pollutants and wastes in the big
cities
which will be a good movement for humans’ lives.
Thus
, the advantages of
this
plan
clearly overshadow the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional areas
  • big cities
  • encouraging
  • industries
  • businesses
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • economic growth
  • overcrowding
  • traffic congestion
  • employment opportunities
  • balanced regional development
  • preservation of natural resources
  • quality of life
  • cultural diversity
  • lack of infrastructure
  • amenities
  • skilled workers
  • impact on the environment
  • decline in the economy
  • social and cultural challenges
  • integrating
  • new industries
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