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In recent years, television has contributed most to changing people’s quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We can see an
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 process of chees making on the diagram. Even with
naked
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 eye, we imagine the hard work, not made in
home
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a home
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 environment, of producing
of
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the great chees we can buy in
super markets
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. It includes nine complex steps so let’s figure them out.
Although
 milk is a quite widespread product, important to have raw milk in the beginning, in case of bacteria that contains
in
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.
Daring
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 the second step milk goes through
tenzyme
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enzyme
 and solidification processes and
in
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 the end
of
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it turns to curds.
Then
 is
grinded
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to
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 small pieces,
draining
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 and
heating
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.
On
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the
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step five salt is added and goes to shaping to get the known form.
The next step is
 fermentation flowing in the special, manufactured containers
about
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 two months and after packing is delivered straight
on
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shop’s
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the shop’s
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 storefronts. Today you have known a little about cheeses and when you next time buy a chees you will think about the long chain of
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 output.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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