The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.
The given tables provide information on temperatures and daylight
hours
in
London
and
sydney
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Sydney
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in
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same
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weekend starting from 28th to 30th December 2018. It is evidence that
London
was colder than
Sydney
.
However
, daylight
hours
in
Sydney
was
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were
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longer than
London
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in London
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. On
friday
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Friday
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during
observed
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the observed
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time,
London
had low
temperature
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temperatures
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, ranging between 4 to 9
Celcius
. In stark contrast,
Sydney
was hot which had
maximum
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temperature
26
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of 26
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Celcius
while
the minimum was 17
Celcius
.
On
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the following days,
London
experienced
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a slightly
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slightly
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increase before
declined
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declining
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at
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to
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10
Celcius
in
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the end of the period.
Nevertherles
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Nevertheless
, a noticeable increase was witnessed in
Sydney
during the next 2 days, reaching its nadir at 31
Celcius
in
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on
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Sunday.
In addition
,
while
daylight
hours
in
London
was approximately 8
hours
,
Sydney
was nearly doubled which had slightly up to 14
hours
.
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Furthermore
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, Sun was rose faster in
Sydney
which
was
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already shined
brighlyt
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bright
brightly
at 5:45
while
in
the
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London
was at 08:05.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, london, sydney, celcius with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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