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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#group #students #classroom #home
Nowadays,
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classes
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 giving more positive sides. In my opinion,
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classes
 give more benefits since
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 could provide interactive lessons, allowing all pupils to do
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collaborative
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 more beneficial than
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This
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 to their children but
also
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 that students may need
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In addition
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, e-learning offers student
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 studying from their bedrooms, giving
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 comfortable sensation during
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 without
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 to travel which has several
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 like risk
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 on the road.
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 ability to develop teamwork
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 and collaboration.
As a result
, pupils could easily learn from their teachers and their friends in order to tackle challenging problems.
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 effective way to train their teamwork abilities. In conclusion,
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,
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 e-learning, I believe that offline
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 the advantages, covering all skills that students need for their future
such
 as collaboration and teamwork abilities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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