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The top priority of business is making money and they do not need to have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree ot disagree.

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It is a matter of question whether the sole aim of businesses is to make profits and not concern themselves with social responsibilities. I do not agree with
this
. On the one hand, the main reason why most companies are established is to make profits.
This
 is of benefit to the job owner and
also
 to ensure the business keeps running. It is mostly out of the financial gains generated that salaries are paid to the employees. With the lots of competition there
are
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, firms need to maintain certain standards at the workplace and
this
 is achieved through the profits made
On the other hand
, it is generally expected that companies have the welfare of their workers at heart. As long as we are humans we are likely to face some challenges and it will be great if our work colleagues and bosses extend some love to comfort us. A survey at
Atomic
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the Atomic
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 Energy Commission firm revealed
from
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that
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 most employees
that
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,
they
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are encouraged to work even harder whenever the Company head makes them feel they have their interest at heart through
for example
 accompanying workers to bury a loved one and not just the services they have to render.
Also
, working firms should
also
 make
provision
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provisions
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 to enhance the development of
its
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their
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 employees
such
 as encouraging them to subscribe to insurance companies that will cater for their health through
settlement
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the settlement
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 of hospital bills.
To sum up
, I strongly think employers should be encouraged to make
profit
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 whilst having the social aspects of
its
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their
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 workers at heart.
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