The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The given pie charts depict the average number of
energy
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used by
Australian
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households and the greenhouse gas emissions resulting from
energy
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use
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.
Overall
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, heating made up as the biggest contributor to
energy
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use
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,
while
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water heating constitutes the greenhouse gas emissions biggest proportion among
Australian
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households. Starting with the first pie chart explains the data on
Australian
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households using
energy
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. Heating was in the first position of contributor at 42%, followed by Water heating at third-tenths. The proportion of other appliances stood as the third contributor to
energy
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use
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at 15%.
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, refrigeration and lighting contribute 7% and 4%, respectively.
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, cooling only contributes a tiny fraction. Moving on to the second pie chart, water heating stood as the biggest proportion of greenhouse gas emissions at 32%.
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, other appliances contribute roughly a quarter.
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heating and refrigeration constitute similar percentages at 15% and 14%, respectively.
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, lighting made up 8%,
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cooling same as the
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households’
energy
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use
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contributing only 3%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, australian, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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