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School should use films, computers and games instead of books. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

#school #films #computers #games #books
the education given in
schools
 is one of the very crucial things in every
children's
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child's
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 life.with the advancement of
technology
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,technology
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 various other methods for the
studies
 come along.people's opinion differs as to whether
films
, computers and
games
 should be used in
schools
instead
 of
books
. I completely disagree with
above
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 statement.In the upcoming
paragraphs
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supportibg
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supporting
 ideas will be explained with respect to the
above stated
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 opinion.
Firstly
, Pupils
gets
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 diverted from
studies
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their studies
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 if
schools
will
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apply
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use
films
, computers and
games
 to impart knowledge. because as we all are aware children's minds are
extrmely
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extremely
 delicate its get diverted very
easy
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. they will
forgot
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 the main motive of watching
the
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films
, playing
games
 and
get
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 highly
addicated
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addicted
 to the
games
 and movies.At
this
age
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 the upbringing should be done very carefully.we need to make sure that tutee's are on
right
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 path of life.
Secondly
, the ads of various adult sites
pops
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 up on the computer screens
while
 playing
games
 which will
sometime
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sometimes
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 send the learner on the wrong path.
Additionally
,
books
 are the cheapest source to provide the education to the students. because not all students can afford
computer
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computers
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 and
games
 so they might not be able to gain knowledge if education
institute
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institutes
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 only use these gadgets for
studies
.
to conclude
,
schools
 should not replace
books
 with
films
,
computer
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computers
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 and
games
 because
books
 are the cheapest source and
the
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apply
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gadgets or the latest technology can divert
childrens
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children's
children
mind
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minds
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 from
studies
 to other
addiction
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addictions
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.
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