School should use films, computers and games instead of books. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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the education given in

schools

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is one of the very crucial things in every

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life.with the advancement of

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various other methods for the

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come along.people's opinion differs as to whether

films

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, computers and

games

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should be used in

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instead

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books

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. I completely disagree with

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statement.In the upcoming

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supportibg

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opinion.

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, Pupils

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diverted from

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studies

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schools

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will

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use

films

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, computers and

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to impart knowledge. because as we all are aware children's minds are

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. they will

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the main motive of watching

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films

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, playing

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and

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highly

addicated

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to the

games

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and movies.At

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the upbringing should be done very carefully.we need to make sure that tutee's are on

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path of life.

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, the ads of various adult sites

pops

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up on the computer screens

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playing

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which will

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send the learner on the wrong path.

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books

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are the cheapest source to provide the education to the students. because not all students can afford

computer

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and

games

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so they might not be able to gain knowledge if education

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only use these gadgets for

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to conclude

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schools

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should not replace

books

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with

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computer

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and

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because

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are the cheapest source and

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gadgets or the latest technology can divert

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children's

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from

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to other

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5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

241 words

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School should use films, computers and games instead of books. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got saticfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.

In many countries, many people do not have enough money to access the internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the Internet?

Many believe that the best way to ensure a happier society is to reduce the difference in income earnings between the rich and poor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?