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Nowadays many students live with their families while others go to another city to study at a university. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of both scenarios.

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In recent years world developed rapidly and higher
education
 expanded globally and it become a necessity from the option. In these,
conditions
 many
students
 have to go to another
city
due to
 the
conditions
 which are not suitable for qualified higher
education
at
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 their
homeland
. When
students
 go to another
city
, they see some challenges and these challenges can affect them both positively and negatively.
Firstly
,
students
 who live in another
city
 for
education
 have more duties and these duties directly
make
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 them one step back in the success on exams from the
student
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students
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 who study in their
homeland
.
For instance
, these
students
thinks
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 about the issues which
students
 educated in their
homeland
 don’t think about meals of the day, bills for the house and cleaning.
Consequently
, they have less time to work and review the classes. So, their academic success is more on the rocks than the
students
 educating in their
homeland
 with their family and
have
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 not any extra duties except studying for classes.
In contrast
 with that, educating in another
city
 has benefits too. When we observe the adults that have a story of
education
 in another
city
, we can easily see the difference between maturity and excellent
life
 skills
according to
 the people who do have not a story like that. If a person has
apply
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 various challenges in their lifetime, especially at a young age, their ability to understand
life
 becomes
proficent
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proficient
 and they can play the game of
life
 with mastery. Because of
this
 fact, studying
apply
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to apply
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 away from home creates
apply
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apply
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more confident people who apply are suited to the difficulties of
life
. In conclusion, studying in another
city
 has both pros and cons. Some people have a background or characteristics for studying like that
while
 others do have not skills
for
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 survive in these hard
conditions
. If the
student
 has the ability to survive these
conditions
 their probability of success in
life
 increases.
On the other hand
,
unsuccesful
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unsuccessful
successful
 academic experience can
also
 occur under these
conditions
 if the
student
 is not well designed for these extra duty-indicated
conditions
.
As a result
, the benefits of studying away from home vary
according to
 the genesis of the
student
.
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