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The chart and table below show customer satisfaction levels in the US with airlines and aspects of air travel in 1999, 2000 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below show customer satisfaction levels in the US with airlines and aspects of air travel in 1999, 2000 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the
satisfacation
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satisfaction
 and
dissatisfacation
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dissatisfaction
 rates of the major nation
arlines
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airlines
 are doing and the table
revealse
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reveals
 information about
proportion
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the proportion
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 of
satisfication
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satisfaction
 in
Gullup
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Gallup
 Polls airline in five different criteria in three different years (1999, 2000 and 2007).
Overall
, the rates of
satisfacation
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satisfaction
 were more than
dissatisfication
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dissatisfaction
 in all three years.
Additionally
, the
percentage
 of people who
satisfied
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were satisfied
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 with specific aspects of the flying experience increased from 1999 to 2007, except for
comfort
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the comfort
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 of seats. The rate of
satisfication
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satisfaction
 with the job that
nation's
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the nation's
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 major airlines was doing dramatically rose in the given period from 65% to 69% in 2000 and 72% in 2007 respectively.
On the other hand
, the
dissatisfication
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dissatisfaction
 rate
was
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slightly declined from 32% to 24% . In the case of
coutery
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country
 of flight attendants and
scheduels
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schedules
schedule
, the
overall
percentage
 of
satisfication
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satisfaction
 was grown
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 4%
fro
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from
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 88 to 92 for the first one and 75 to 79 for the second.
While
this
percentage
 was stable in 2000 and 2007 for
scheduels
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schedules
schedule
, it was increased from 90 to 92 for
outery
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outer
 of flight attendants. These changes were more significant in the case of ticket prices, which is
noticablly
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noticeably
 increased from 45% to 65% respectively. The proportion of
coutesy
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courtesy
 of check-in/gate agents rose slightly
fron
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from
 87 to 89
percent
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per cent
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. There is no evidence of the ratio of comfort seats in 1999 and 2000,
while
this
percentage
 was 47 in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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