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Some people think the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and others vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion.

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The
pollution
 caused by
vehicles
 on roads is a major contributor to environmental problems.The number of
vehicles
 is increasing constantly and so is
pollution
. Some
people
 are of the view that increasing the
fuel
prices
 by the government will help curb
this
 problem, but
this
 is not the case. I think, increasing the
fuel
prices
 would motivate
people
 to
use
 public
transport
 to help save the environment, but a very limited population will opt for it and there would not be a major reduction in environmental problems with
this
 approach.
To begin
 with, most of the
people
 choose comfort over cost. Even if the cost of
fuel
 rises,
due to
 the comfort and convenience one gets by travelling in their own vehicle, a majority will still continue to
use
 their cars and personal
vehicles
. Increasing
fuel
prices
 will not have much impact on personal vehicle usage.
In addition
, travelling in a personal car saves time and everyone prefers to be punctual and become more effective.
Hence
, they will not let go of their personal
vehicles
 even though the
fuel
 price rises.
Secondly
, the population is increasing day by day and public
transport
 facilities are not expanding at the same rate.
For instance
, there is a lot of crowd on inter-city buses on weekdays as a lot of
people
 travel to other cities for work. They have to wait to get
transport
such
 as a bus or an auto.
Hence
, to solve these issues, they opt to travel in their own car.
Hence
, the government has to expand the local
transport
 system in order to curb
pollution
 by personal
vehicles
 and cars. In conclusion, I think there are other aspects that the government has to work on in order to control environmental
pollution
. They can take the help of technology to bring in green
fuel
 to be used in
vehicles
 rather than restricting its
use
. Restricting the
use
 of cars by raising
fuel
prices
 will not help much in saving the Mother Earth
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