The chart below show the proportion of businesses making e commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015and 2019

The chart below show the proportion of businesses making e commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015and 2019
The chart above depicts
information
about the proportion of e-commerce business purchases in 5 periods between 2015 and 2019 in manufacturing, construction,wholesale, retail and
information
and communication.
Overall
, all the directions
if
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businesses in e-commerce are increasing
year
by
year
. Construction and
wholesales
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wholesale
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have the same
statistic
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of
raising
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and almost the same results.
Moreover
, wholesales,
information
and communications have the biggest proportion of sales
in
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the end of
last
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the last
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period.
To begin
with,
manufactures
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manufacturers
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and
retails
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retail
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had 30% of sales in 2015 and both rapidly increased to 50% in the next
year
,
however
manufactures
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decreased in the next
year
and raised step by step to 60% in the
last
period
while
retails
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retail
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stayed on the same point of 50-55% in the next 3 periods.
On the other hand
,
whole sales
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wholesales
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and construction increased gradually,
year
by
year
increasing by 10-15%.
Also
, they peaked
their
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highest point in 2019, 62% and 57% respectively. Since
measurement
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the most popular and biggest proportion have
information
and communication. In the beginning, having the number of 60% it peaked
75
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at 75
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% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words information, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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