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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of time since digital technology is now replacing their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #time #technology #function
The majority of
people
 argue that
libraries
 are no longer necessary
,
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 since technology
also
 provides us with a wide range of
books
.
Although
 I agree that
libraries
 bring benefits for
people
, there are
also
 some points that are worth reading
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 the usage of gadgets. I totally disagree with
this
 statement,
however
 there are some notions, which I discuss in the following essay. To start with, e-
books
 become quite popular among
people
, so the majority of readers tend to read
books
 via the use of technology.
According to
 the statistics, it gives access to old manufactured
books
 or sold ones via online sources.
Therefore
 it is beneficial for
people
 with busy schedules and who cannot attend
libraries
, to have
books
 in online format.
Furthermore
, the storage of preferable
books
 gives a chance to expand the collection of picked-up
books
, since
this
 facility individualizes selected genres for
people
's taste.
On the other hand
, I would argue that online functions cannot replace public
libraries
' atmosphere. Many
people
 are incapable of using gadgets,
thus
 it
makes
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inconvenient to use e-
books
.
As a result
 traditional
libraries
 still become a first choice to acquire information. To add
also
 information in the library is more reliable, as nowadays
people
 can easily post on websites without any assessment and categorization.
However
, the sources in public
libraries
 are carefully organized and selected by staff members.
To conclude
, despite the advantages of online sources, in my ,opinion there are sufficient grounds to reject the statement that using physical
libraries
 is unnecessary.
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