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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of time since digital technology is now replacing their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #time #technology #function
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The majority of
people
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 argue that
libraries
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 are no longer necessary
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 since technology
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 provides us with a wide range of
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 I agree that
libraries
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 bring benefits for
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, there are
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 the usage of gadgets. I totally disagree with
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 statement,
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 there are some notions, which I discuss in the following essay. To start with, e-
books
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 become quite popular among
people
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, so the majority of readers tend to read
books
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 via the use of technology.
According to
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 the statistics, it gives access to old manufactured
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 or sold ones via online sources.
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 it is beneficial for
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 with busy schedules and who cannot attend
libraries
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, to have
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 in online format.
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, the storage of preferable
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 gives a chance to expand the collection of picked-up
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, since
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 facility individualizes selected genres for
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's taste.
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, I would argue that online functions cannot replace public
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' atmosphere. Many
people
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 are incapable of using gadgets,
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inconvenient to use e-
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As a result
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 traditional
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 still become a first choice to acquire information. To add
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 information in the library is more reliable, as nowadays
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 can easily post on websites without any assessment and categorization.
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, the sources in public
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 are carefully organized and selected by staff members.
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, despite the advantages of online sources, in my ,opinion there are sufficient grounds to reject the statement that using physical
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 is unnecessary.
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