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The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.

The maps bellow show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now , and plans for its development.
#maps #bellow #show #centre #town #islip #plans #development
The display maps show the
centre
 of
small
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a small
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town
 called
Islip
 as it
now
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is now
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, and plans for its development.
Islip
town
centre
 now, in the north
side
 there is countryside, some shops
as well as
main
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the main
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 road.
In
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 the east
side
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,side
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 there is a park.
In
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 the south
side
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,side
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 there is housing and
in
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on
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west-south
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the west-south
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side
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 there is a school.
However
, in
Islip
town
centre
: planned development,
in
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on
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 the west
side
 there is
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway.
In
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 the south
side
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,side
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 there is a school
as well as
 housing as it is in
Islip
town
 now. There
are
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is
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 some new housing. In the
centre
 there
is
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are
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 shops. There is
an
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a
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pedestrians
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pedestrian
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 only in between
shopping
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the shopping
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centre
 and shops. There is new housing
in
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on
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north-east
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the north-east
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side
. There
even
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is even
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 a small car park near to bus station. The major change is in housing.
To conclude
, there is
great
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a great
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 difference
in
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between
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Islip
 small
town
 and plans for its development.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, town, islip, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential
  • commercial
  • pedestrianization
  • relocation
  • sustainability
  • urban planning
  • land use
  • green spaces
  • civic amenities
  • public transport options
  • commute
  • zoning
  • traffic congestion
  • redevelopment
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