You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter •correct the information in the article •explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information •suggest what the magazine should do about this situation Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in order to complain about an article I read in your
which has incorrect
To begin
with, as far as the incorrect
is concerned, I would like to correct the
about the smoking pipe
due to
that It is wrong. In
, the
real world
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capital of pipe for smoking is Saint Claude in France
of Pekin as you mentioned.
In addition
, It is important for your
to give correct
due to
that readers follow your advice, leading to the
that you need to be professional and accurate.
For example
, If you publish that the Eiffel Tower is in Sydney, people
do not will
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trust your
but not least, I would like to suggest to the editor to rectify the
in the
. On account of that mistake, I would like to request to make a reportage of the real capital resulting to bring more tourism. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you require any
. Kind regards, Mr Van
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea and maintains a clear progression of thoughts.
task response
Fully address all aspects of the task prompt, including correcting the information, explaining the importance of accuracy, and making a suggestion for the magazine to address the issue.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal and appropriate greeting and closing for a letter to the editor of a magazine.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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