The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
percentage
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of the
Yemen
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and Italy population in the year 2000 and predict the rate of population in the year 2050.
Overall
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, In the year 2000, the largest segment in
Yemen
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was the children and
teen
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teens
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at the
age
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of 0-14
years
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.
While
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people
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in
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aged
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age
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15-59
years
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provided
the
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a
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significant part in Italy. During 2050, The prediction shows that the
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people
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number of people
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whose
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apply
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age
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aged
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is
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apply
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15-19
years
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will increase gradually and shows the biggest segment.
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Moreover
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,Moreover
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the biggest segment in Italy 2050 is the
elder
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elderly
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whose
age
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is more
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then
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than
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so
years
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old. The 15 - 59
years
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old
people
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in
Yemen
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accounted for 46.3% and will experience 57.3% in 2050. In 2050,
people
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who
age
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is over 60
years
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old, will rise 2.1% from 2000.
Likewise
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people
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whose
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who
show examples
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age
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are
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is
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apply
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over 60
years
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old in
italy
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Italy
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, the
percentage
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of
these
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the
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population will reach
to
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apply
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42.3%
,
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apply
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and
increased
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increase
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by 12.21%
However
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, the
percentage
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of children 0-15
years
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in
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old in
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Yemen
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and Italy, will
dropped
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drop
be dropped
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by 13.1% and 2.8% respectively. The
percentage
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of 15 - 59
years
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is going down to 46.2% in 2050.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, yemen, age, years, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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