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The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002

The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002
The table illustrates the proportions in five countries which are (Ireland , Italy , Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002.
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, there were three categories of consumer spending. Food, drinks and tobacco were the highest sections in spending,
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 leisure and education were the lowest classes in expenditure . As for the terms of drinks ,food and tobacco , Turkey was the upmost in the percentage of costs at 32.14%.
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 , the smallest ratio in
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 group was in Sweden at 15.77%. The average of the spending in
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 category was 16.3% in Italy. Leisure and education were the least spent in all five countries
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 Turkey was the highest at 4.35%. Clothing and footwear were the third category. The top percentage of
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 section was 9% in Italy compared to Sweden which was the lowest ratio at 5.40%.The average of costs in
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 group was approximately 5.4% in Ireland.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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