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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driven automatically means
driverless
. The
driver
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drivers
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 inside these
vehicles
 will be passengers. For me, I think
driverless
vehicles
' advantages outweigh the
disadvantagesas
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disadvantages as
disadvantages
 it more flexible,
less
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have fewer
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crash
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crashes
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,
less
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fewer
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accidents
, ... so it much more
convinent
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convenient
. On the one hand,
driverless
vehicles
 may have some impacts on the driver. There
willbe
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will be
 some situations where we need humanity to solve the problem.
For example
, if we are speeding
ad
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and
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 we are going to crash into
anther
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another
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vehicles
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vehicle
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 too close to
brake
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the brake
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, so it better to steer to another which is the
driverless
vehicles
 will never
finds
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. Driver
wil
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will
 lose their driving skill as
wellif
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well if
well
 they don't do it frequently and imagines the driver-bots are not working. How can we deal with
that
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those
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 problems? One another thing is that
driverless
 cars cannot be used in some emergency
situation
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situations
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. Ambulance drivers must be
vetu
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very
 skill when they
speeding
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speed
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 but not crash
in
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into
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 any
vehicles
 or
pesidents
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presidents
residents
 which are
to
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too
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On the other hand
,
driverless
 will bring big different experiences from driving
car
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a car
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.
Firstly
, using
an automatic cars
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an automatic car
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give
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gives
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 us more flexity as we do not have to drive that
car
, so we can enjoy time with family, or just
to
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apply
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take
nap
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a nap
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 for a break to recharge
instead
 of driving
car
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a car
the car
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. We can work
while
 moving as
welland
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well and
 still ensure
the
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apply
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privacy.
Driverless
vehicles
 will
be led
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lead
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 to
less
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fewer
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car
crashing
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crashes
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,
accidents
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and accidents
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 because the government can
apply
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apply
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the
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apply
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limit
vehicles
' speed to particular
road
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roads
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 so there will be
less
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fewer
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crashing
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crashes
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 and
accidents
 because of speeding driving too
slow anymore
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slowly
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.
Overall
,
although
 there are some disadvantages of
driverless
vehicles
 in some
case
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cases
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, I think that the
advantage
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advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages.
Driverless
 will make people more flexible,
led
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leading
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 to less crashing and
accidents
 and more
convience
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convenience
, so we should believe in the development of
driverless
vehicles
.
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