In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

My name is Basil Turkin and I have decided with my family to move from Toronto to your town.
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, I have two children and I want to know about the possibility of studying in your school. My son is in the
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grade and I have heard that
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math. Despite
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, he has a high score
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interested in music. I hope that your educational style
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fit him the best and
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