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The table shows the number of overseas visits to the UK by country of residence and mode of travel in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feayures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of overseas visits to the UK by country of residence and mode of travel in two years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feayures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 chart illustrates the
way
 of travel and the amount of foreign
visits
 to the UK in 2011 and 2013.
Overall
, most of the countries'
way
 of
visits
 to
UK
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the UK
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 which
include
Correct subject-verb agreement
includes
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 the
air
 and
tunnel
 increased in two years, except for Portugal in
air
 and Italy and Sweden in
tunnel
.
In addition
,
the
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apply
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Italy and France had the highest increase in
air
 and
tunnel
 respectively. Even though all the nations increased foreign
visits
 in two years,
the
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apply
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Portugal, Italy and Sweden still
drop
Wrong verb form
dropped
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 in 2013.
Firstly
,
in
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apply
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the
amount
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number
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 of
visits
 by
air
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airway
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way
 was 260,000 in 2011
in
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apply
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Portugal,
however
, it dropped to 251,000 in 2013.
Furthermore
,
in
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apply
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the
way
 of
visits
 by
tunnel
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a tunnel
the tunnel
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 in Italy dropped from 24,000 to 23,000, and Sweden
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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a
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apply
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dramatically dropped from 19,000 to 3,000.
Comparing
Wrong verb form
Compared
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 with other nations, Italy and France had the most obvious increase. In Italy, it had a 117,000
visits
 increase in
air
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airway
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way
visits
, which surged from 1,445,000 to 1,562,000
visits
 in two years. In France, the foreign
visits
 from
tunnel
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the tunnel
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 increased from 1,514,000 to 1,761,000 between 2011 to 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words way, visits, air, tunnel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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