The two bar charts give information about the proportion of obesity in boys and girs between the ages of 12 and 19 by nationality in the United States for the two decades (2010 and 2014)

The two bar charts give information about the proportion of obesity in boys and girs between the ages of 12 and 19 by nationality in the United States for the two decades (2010 and 2014)
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Bar charts illustrate the details about the level of overweight in 2 different genders from 12 to 19 years old of populations in US for the two decades (2010 and 2014).
Overall
, in both genders, there were more higher in 2014 than in 2004.
Furthermore
,
while
the figures
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male
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Hispanic
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in 2014 was the highest, in 2014,
non-Hispanic
black was the highest among females. As we can be seen from the male's graph,
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non-hispanic
black,
non-hispanic
white and Hispanic in 2004 were 11%, 12%, and 13% , respectively. There was a dramatic increase in 2014 which were 20%, 17%, and 27%, following those order.
Moreover
, Hipanic was the highest among these categories at 13% in 2004 and 27% in 2014. In marked contrast, the level of obesity among females was the highest with non-HispanicHispanic Black at 29% in 2014 and Hispanic at 17% in 2004.
In addition
, in 2004,
non-Hispanic
white was at the bottom of the bar chart at 9% of obese girls in the United States.
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