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A friend of yours has recently written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem at your workplace in the past. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell your friend how you feel about the problem explain how you faced a similar situation in the past suggpst possible solutions to the problem

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Dear Aman, Hope
your
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 are doing great. Recently, I have
receieved
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received
 your message regarding the workplace problem you are dealing with. I felt very bad about how some employees
are
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 trying to dominate
you
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me
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. Not only
this
, they always put all the load of
work
 on you
at the end
 moment. I think these kind of situations at
work
 put your morale down and makes you weak. Honestly speaking, when I joined my
work
 I had to
also
 deal with
these kind
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 of problems. My
colleauges
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colleagues
 always tried to ignore me. Whenever I got stuck and
find
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 it
diffcult
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difficult
 to
work
, they never helped me but made fun of me. I would suggest you
to
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prove yourself with your
hardwork
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hard work
. Do not let other people affect you. In fact, you can have
meeting
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 with your manager and let them know about
this
 situation. Because no employee has
right
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 to
harrass
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harass
 you at
workplace
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the workplace
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. Always stand
for
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up for
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 yourself and show people you are not less than them. I know you are
strong
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a strong
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 person and can easily handle these problems. Hope we
we
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will meet soon. Yours lovingly, Jashan
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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