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the world would be a much poorer place without colour. To what extent you agree or disagree

#world #place #colour
Colours
 are the greatest blessings, that God bestowed upon the
people
 in the
world
. Have anyone has imagined
about
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a
world
 which has no
colour
 in it
.
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 I truly feel that the concept of a
world
 without
colour
 is absolutely difficult even to imagine. The impact of
colour
 in our
life
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 is widely spread and
well visible
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 in every corner of the
world
. Humankind
are
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 deeply connected with various
colours
 from the very early stage of community life, especially with the celebration of special events and
also
 during the occasion of different types of significant functions.
For example
,
people
 used to wear white
colour
 clothes
while
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 wedding ceremonies
where
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as in
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funeral
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 with black
colour
 dresses.
Thus
 it is obvious that
people
 are curious and interested
about
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 the attributes of
colours
.
Furthermore
, nature
are
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 enriched with various
colours
 and mankind distinguishes
taste
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the taste
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 and quality of fruits with their
colours
as well as
 with
the
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 smell. Because of the
colour
people
 can identify the taste and names of each
fruits
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fruit
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 as there are several fruits
are
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available in
the
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nature and most of them
are varies
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 from continent to continent.
For instance
,
orange
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colour
help
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 us to determine the orange fruit, like
wise
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 apple
also
 with its lovely red
colour
.
In addition
 to that,
colour
make
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 us happy with its presence
itself
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. The
colour
 of
rainbow
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the rainbow
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 and blood coloured
sun set
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 always fill our hearts with pleasure, often with the picturesque view. To put it in a nutshell, it is undoubtedly
through
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that without
colour
world
will
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 be
much
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 poorer
places
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. I opine that
,
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 it will be impossible to imagine a
world
 without
the
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beautiful
colours
 as
by
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seeing several
colours
 of nature brings happiness to humanity
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