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Some people say that History is one of the most important school subjects. What is your opinion?

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The importance of teaching
history
 as a part of
educational
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 curriculum is not hidden from anyone.
However
, it would be unwise for
teacher
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the teacher
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 to completely ignore courses related to
technology
 and practical skills and arrange their study plan only based on
history
. As we are living in an era where everything is almost related to
technology
,
history
 as a lesson that belongs to the past can lose its value. Learning subjects referring to
technology
 will help
student
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students
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 in present
as well as
 the future.
For example
, if students
had
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 learned a computer science subject,
then
 they will be able to do a job in a company where computer-related study is required. The rapid advancements in
technology
 and the importance of knowing a practical skill
on
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 society make it critical for students to learn about these subjects.
Technology
 plays a crucial role in many aspects of modern life, from healthcare to communication and transportation.
Also
, being
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 with some kind of proficiency have a chance of finding a suitable occupation in the market. In spite of the benefit of prioritizing
technology
 and skill because of providing outstanding comfort and progress in our
life
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,
history
 can help us to understand current world issues so that we can face the challenges efficiently.
Therefore
,
while
 they both have their own significance, modern technologies have a more immediate impact on people’s daily lives and their functions.
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