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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented maps
illustrates
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 the development which took place at
the
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Templeton's seaside
resort
 for a 15-year span.
Overall
, a comparison of the two maps shows a significant change
of
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 seaside
resort
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resorts
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 between 1990 and 2005. In 1990, the aforementioned enormously greener home-owning area with a tremendous amount of
trees
 and family dwellings,
however
 during the next 15 years the tourist centre witnessed substantial change. The most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 is that all of the
trees
, except
trees
 planted in
upside
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 of
town
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 were cut down, with all the houses and
trees
 beside
railway
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the railway
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 station being demolished and replaced by
new
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 factory.
Furthermore
, a new industrial estate with
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a supermarket
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supermarket
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a supermarket
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 and residential buildings appeared
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in
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the west-north
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west-north
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the west-north
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 of
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the resort
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resort
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the resort
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. The
trees
 near
school
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 were cleared to make way for an airport.
Also
, some of
houses
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the houses
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 near
railway
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the railway
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 were replaced by new houses, Another
developments
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development
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were
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 the construction of a ferry on the shores of the sea
nearby
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 a
railway
 station. The
last
 but not least change was
establishment
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the establishment
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 of
railway
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a railway
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 in
south
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the south
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 of the
resort
, so the previous
railway
's length was expanded.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resort, trees, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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