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The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below show the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The provided chart illustrates the amount of
money
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 spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume and
cameras
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) in
France
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 and the
UK
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 in 2010. Units are , measured in pounds sterling.
Overall
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, the
UK
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 spent more
money
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 on consumer goods than
France
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 in the period given. Both the British and the French spent most of their
money
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 on cars
whereas
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 the least amount of
money
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 was spent on perfume in the
UK
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 compared to
cameras
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 in
France
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.
Furthermore
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, the most significant difference in
expenditure
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 between the two countries was on
cameras
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. In terms of cars, people in the
UK
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 spent about 45000$,
while
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 the French spent 400000$ on the same item.
Similarly
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, the British
expenditure
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 was higher than the French, around 400000$ and 300000$, respectively. In the
UK
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, the
expenditure
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 on
cameras
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 (350000$) was over double that of
France
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, which was only 150000$.
On the other hand
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, the amount of
money
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 spent on other items was higher in
France
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. Above 350000$ was spent by the French on computers, which was slightly more than the British who spent exactly 350000$. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for 200000$ of
expenditure
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 in
France
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 but under 150000$ in the
UK
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, cameras, france, uk, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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