The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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given bar diagram
are shown
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the
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figures
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of family in the United States
by
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according by
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their yearly remuneration.
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, in the
year
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2007,
lowest
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the lowest
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earner category was $75,000-$99,999. Only 14
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milions
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million
family
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families
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earned
this
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class.
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hand
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highest
catgory
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category
$100,000 or more was achieved by almost
29millions
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29 million
tribes. Less than $25000, $25000-$49,999, and $50,000-$74,999
were belonged
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to
almost
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same
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group, which were 20.5-26
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milions
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million
.
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,
the
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year
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2011,
lowest
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the lowest
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income generated category was $75,000-99,999 which is like the
year
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2007. Barely 13
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milions
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million
households have achieved it. Another similarity
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found here with the
year
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2007, which was,
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when nearly
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27
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milions
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million
millions
tribes had earned $100,000 or more. In
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same classification which is near to 30
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milions
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million
millions
family
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families
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achieved less than $25,000, and $25,000-$49,999 revenue. Again, like 2007 between $50,000-$74,999 salary
earner
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earners
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belonged to
near
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20
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milions
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million
millions
group.
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, in the
year
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2015,
highest
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the highest
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income
$
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was $
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100,000 or more
earned
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was earned
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by 37
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milions
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million
millions
family
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families
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.
Whereas
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in
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year
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lowest salary; less than $25,000, and $25,000-$49,999 were generated by 28-30
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milions
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million
households. From 15
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milions
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million
to 21
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million
millions
milions
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,milions
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family
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families
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achieved $50,000-$74,999, and 75,000-$99,000 income.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, milions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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