The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The bar chart shows the rate of same for
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individuals
indivuals
born in Correct your spelling
individuals
Australia
and outside Australia
residing in urban, rural and town during the years 1995 and 2010
Overall
, the percentage of people
reside
in urban Wrong verb form
residing
area
has Fix the agreement mistake
areas
been
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apply
rises
dramatically. Wrong verb form
risen
On the other hand
, more and more people
chooses
to reside outside rural Change the verb form
choose
areas
.
In year
1995, the percentage of Change the article
the year
people
who born in Australia
and living in cities was about 50% which was rose in year
2010 to almost 65%, Change the article
the year
while
the people
residing in Correct quantifier usage
number of people
towns
are dropped from 20% to approximately 18% in the year
2010. Likewise
we can see the drop in the percentage of Add a comma
,Likewise
people
living in rural areas
also
in the year
1995 almost 50% of the people
who born in Australia
and resides
in Wrong verb form
resided
rurals
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rural
areas
which was
dropped in the Change the verb form
were
year
2010 to near by
18% Correct your spelling
nearby
percent
.
The data for Change the spelling
per cent
non Australian
shows that Add a hyphen
non-Australian
people
prefers
to live in Change the verb form
prefer
cites
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cities
instead
of living in towns
and rural area as in the year
1995 nearly 60% of the population resides in Cities, whereas
15% in
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were in
towns
and 40% in rural areas
. For the period of 2010
the number has been inclined to 80% for cities, Add a comma
,2010
however
these numbers Add a comma
,however
remains
almostChange the verb form
remain
Correct article usage
the
people
in towns
However
its
dropped for Correct pronoun usage
it
people
living in rural areas
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