The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passengers miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passengers miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.
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The chart illustrates the
number
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of
injuries
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and
incidents
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per 100
million
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passengers on five different types of transportation ( commuter
rail
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, heavy
rail
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, light
rail
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,
bus
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and
demand
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response) in 2002.
Overall
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,
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most
incidents
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and
injuries
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were reported
on
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on-demand
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demand
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responses,
while
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the lowest
number
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were
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reported for commuter
rail
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.
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, the
number
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of
incidents
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per 100
million
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PMT
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was always more than that
the
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one for
injuries
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. The highest
number
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of
incidents
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and
injuries
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was
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belonged to
demand
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responses with 225 and 173 per 100
million
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PMT
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,
while
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the lowest
number
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was belonged
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belonged
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to commuter
rail
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with
approximately10
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approximately 10
time
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times
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less
that
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than
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demand
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response
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responses
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with 20 and 17 per 100
million
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PMT
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respectively. The people who were travelled by
bus
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were the ones who exposed to
second
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the second
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high
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highest
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rate of road accidents with 76 for the case of
incidents
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and 66
for
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the
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injuries
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. In the case of light
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rail
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,rail
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the
number
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of
incidents
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was similar to the one of
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bus
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the bus
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,
while
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the
number
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of
injuries
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was almost two
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thirds
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in comparison with
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bus
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the bus
a bus
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. Heavy
rail
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was the second
safe
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safest
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type of transportation with almost 50
incidents
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per 100
million
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PMT
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and 35
injuries
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per 100
million
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PMT
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, injuries, incidents, million, rail, bus, demand, pmt with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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