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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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The current century provides technological progress which makes daily improvements and innovations. That
kind
 of innovation can be connected to any sphere of life, and among them can be indicated
the
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driverless
vehicles
. In the
,
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future all
vehicles
 will be equipped with
autopilot
 technology.
People
 will be in the only role of passengers. It is undeniable that transport has become an essential part of our everyday lives.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
 find
autopilot
 in
cars
 beneficial,
while
 others consider everything associated with
autopilot
systems
 negatively. I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. One of the main positives of
autopilot
 transport is that they are fast and reliable. In car markets one will find numerous amounts of
cars
 which are equipped with automatic hold
system
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systems
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, staying inside of the line and speed control
systems
. Large vehicle factories
work
 on
autopilot
systems
.
For example
, Tesla has integrated
autopilot
systems
 into their software since 2015. And right now they have the most reliable and efficient driverless car options. Another advantage is that
people
 will not need to learn how to drive and get driving licenses.
Due to
 that
fact
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people
 will have more time to relax on the way to
there
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their
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 hometown and there will be
less
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 traffic
congestions
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congestion
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 and accidents.
Autopilot
systems
 will be both more effective in small cities and even in
mega cities
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.
As a
result
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 it will cause essentially declining gas usage because
vehicles
 will make trips by the shortest distance possible.
However
, it will help to protect
environment
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the environment
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 from gasoline emissions. Turning to the other side of the argument, roads and highways are not equipped with any type of infrastructure that will allow that transportation system
work
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 well.
For instance
, the roads do not have adequate traffic lights, painted notes
and
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 other objects which will make that transport
work
 as they have been designed. Principally, if there are only that
kind
 of
vehicles
, the workers of that sphere will lose their jobs and there will be more unemployment in the workforce.
Namely
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 trucks, buses and
trains
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 drivers will lose
the
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their
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 income,
work
 and pensions.Another major disadvantage is the economy will suffer from tax cuts and that will make a
kind
 of economic impact, and because of that workers will not receive any income in order to pay taxes to the government. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to a conclusion that driverless
vehicles
 will make our life easier, better and safer,
nevertheless
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 there will be jobless
people
. Technology is growing rapidly and we cannot stop that movement.
Consequently
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 the day will come when
cars
 will not need any
kind
 of driver. Artificial intelligence will control the
cars
, traffic lights,
cameras
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.
Thus
, I consider that advantages
overweigh
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 the disadvantages.
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